Hi Scotty :) You said you need some help for your characters? I got an idea for Beroona's physical appearance and I hope it can help.
I looked at her name and a picture came into my head: When I saw her in my head, she was tall, with emerald green eyes, her fur was a reddish-brown with dark brown stripes. Her weapons were a longbow and blue flighted arrows. She was wearing a dark green and light brown kilt, a dark green shirt and a light brown vest with a green cat's eye pin, an old "Thousand Eye" emblem, pinned to the left side of her vest.
Oh dear....I really would love to because I adore sketching, but I'm afraid at the moment it's not possible. My scanner is completely shot and I'm not sure at the moment where I can get another one that would work as well. Also, if I ever do fix it, I've got three other RW pictures to draw for people which I promised them ages ago.
The only thing I can think of is if I were to try to free-hand one on GIMP or MSpaint, but I must warn you it will not look as good as other pictures I usually draw.
Sorry for the Delay - my access to the family computer has been limited over this weekend because we had programs at church I had volunteered to go to, and I wasn't in the house much. What did you want to talk about?
Well, I'd like you to draw Salem, Slagar, Jewel, Jade (Salem's younger sister; who looks like Jewel but has bright green eyes, hence her name) and Slagar's illegtimate son, Fionnbarr 'Finn' MacGrath he had from a brief affair with a vixen wench named Cailleach MacGrath. Finn, at 24, is 8 years older than Salem (having been born in 1385 AH; she was born in 1393) and has golden fur, and green eyes. As for clothes, draw whatever you want but I can imagine him wearing something like a mailed tunic. I can also picture Finn as having a sly look on his face. And that's all :)
I'm SO sorry for the huge delay. My computer (the one with the scanner and the photoshop) has been broken for several weeks now and is in the shop; I've been using my laptop for everything since. I will scan the pictures as soon as I get the chance.
Lol I'm just going to warn you; the Dogfather is set in the 1930's so there's going to be some moderate language here and there (although trust me it's nothing worse than what you'd hear out of my high school hallways) and some darker themes; such as abuse. Would you still be interested in reading it despite this dark matter?
As long as you don't use any word harsher than d--- or h--- I guess I'm OK with it. Otherwise I'd prefer an edited version. As to the darker themes, my definition of "dark" is a bit unorthodox so I'd have to see for myself to judge.
I read the first 4 chapters for a start (I read VERY fast),and I have to say your writing style is engaging. I can almost picture the scenes like a movie. The plot is interesting; it sort of reminds me of a harsher version of the old gangster-and-federal-agents-based TV show "The Untouchables", which I watch re-runs of almost daily. But there is a bit more language than I like; the issue here is not so much the harshness as the frequency. It actually seems a little less intellegent when every other sentence contains profanity. But other than that, it's a good start and I'll look at the rest of it when I get more time. I have another project I'm working on ATM for church so I will need to sign off in a couple minutes.
One - Did you see your prize picture? I got it uploaded a few days ago.
Two - I don't know where you live (don't tell me, please) or if you have a Sam's Club store out there. If you do, I saw the first two seasons of TaleSpin on DVD at my local Sam's Club so if you have a membership you should check it out. :-)
Three- Still a bit pressed for time but I'll get to reading the rest of your Talespin Fanfic as soon as I can.
Sorry I took so long to respond; I had to leave. Finished now.
The whole style of the story in general (I may have already mentioned this) reminds me very much of a grittier version of my very favorite old TV show "The Untouchables", which is also set in the 30s. The similarities are by no means exact or copy-cat-ish, but they are there and it helps me picture it a bit more clearly. For instance, since you have gangsters in the story, I can see them as the animal characters that you wrote, but I hear the voices like the actors in the show. Also, all that kind of stuff aside, your character descriptions help a lot with visualizations.
Finished it. Description-wise, it was very good. The plot was also good, and I liked the characters very much. However, it had far too much language, and some of the content was not what I believe I should be reading, morally. If you write a sequal, I would suggest you seriously tone it down because I'm afraid I don't feel I should read it otherwise. I hope you understand I am not being mean; you still are a good author. This is just my own personal beliefs, regarding what I should read, that I'm referring to here.
Hey, I need some help with Bloody Waves. I'm actually going to update today (hopefully) and I need a little more help. Do you think I should just continue Chapter 3; or end it and go to Chapter 4? I also have no idea how the scene with Todd, Kenzie and Gatch is going to go, so I need some suggestions.
BTW: I've been trying to write but lol I'm not feeling that great physically at the moment
Well, let's see. Before we begin, I need a bit of a refresher on who Gatch is (brain's about fried with busyness right now) and of his relationship to Todd and Kenzie. Secondly, they are just about to meet for the first time and sail to Southsward, right? Thirdly, they are going to meet Kenzie's lover, I remember that; did you decide on a name or did you want to use the one I suggested?
I'm using the name you suggested. I was thinking that Kenzie suspects that Todd has a secret crush on her (which she does) and acts her typical stubborn, ornery self towards him much to his frustration
The Rogue Crew doesn't hear Todd (too much bickering, squabbling) and sails further down shore because of reefs. The ship then lets down anchor and sends a longboat towards the shore for supplies. All the otters onboard are armed in case of vermin. Todd chases down the longboat and waves at it. As it's either evening/stormy/foggy (dark for some reason) by the time they get close, Kenzie, who's in the boat, mistakes him for vermin. Gatch gives the order to hold fire and stand down; however, Kenzie disobeys and shoots at Todd with an arrow. It strikes him in a non-fatal but really painful area (collarbone or something like that) and he passes out. When they get onshore and see Todd, Gatch berates Kenzie for acting without thinking, and defying his orders. This causes a bit of a violent argument between the two. Kenzie is then made to take Todd back to the ship and revive him, and is told that he is her responsibility, and that if anything happens to him it will be on her head.
Todd wakes up to see a sourly-muttering Kenzie ("it's not fair"..."might have been vermin" ...."how was I to know..." Etc) bandaging him. As it's apparent, before he says a word, that he's instantly been smitten by her (the first female he's seen in goodness knows how long), Kenzie becomes even more frustrated and exhasperated. When he tries, clumsily, to sweet-talk her, she nips it in the bud by telling him where they're bound and expounding, almost cruelly, on the fact she's spoken for and how wonderful Rohir is compared to his scruffy self. Todd gets a bit mad at her for being so wantonly brutal; they are about to start an argument when Gatch comes in to relieve Kenzie for a while. She exits abruptly. Todd and Gatch then discuss Todd's predicament. Gatch has heard nothing of Antaga. However, Todd then asks to be allowed to sail with them for a time anyway, in case they happen to run across some information later on (also, he wants to stay near Kenzie for a while). Gatch agrees, on the condition he follow orders like a proper Rogue Crew member while he's aboard, and conducts himself as such, until such time as he leaves the ship. Todd agrees, and Gatch leaves him to sleep his injuries and fatigue off.
(Now would be a good time to do a cut to an Antaga scene, maybe like the one we discussed way back when)
Tiring. I had to sell my bicycle so I took up jogging to make up for it. It's kind of hard trying to fit that it (it takes longer to jog somewhere than to bike) with the rest of my schedule at summerschool, church volunteering, working in my pumpkin field, and helping keep up the house.
Also this year is the first time I've ever jogged in my life so my stamina still needs work; I just barely managed to drag myself one mile today and I know I can walk/bike much longer without episode so I'm obviously still doing something wrong. It's also been a bit hot around here to do anything outside, like exercise or gardening. A steady week of 100+ in June is odd for my area; I'd expect that in August around here, but not even one day like that in June except once in a blue moon.
Sadly; this is really the only information you can find on TaleSpin online- it's a very obscure cartoon. In the late 90's through the early 2000's when most of the original fans were teens or young adults; there seemed to be a pretty strong online community with plenty of fansites built; but it ended when these fans grew up and moved on with their lives, and 99% (but probably 100%) of these websites are either no longer online, or simply no longer being used.There IS one website mainly for the next generation of TaleSpin fans that I go on; TaleSpin Source, but that's about it.
I just thought I'd tell you all this information since I recently decided to start writing a Talespin fanfiction series of my own and was wondering if you would like to read it (even though the first book is already finished, sorry)
I want to update Bloody Waves badly but first I really need some help to fill in the gaps: In the next update; Chapter 4, Todd is going to meet Gatch, leader of 1679 AH's Rogue Crew, as well as the haughty, almost villainous Kenzie MacDuncan, who comes from a line of otter nobility in Southsward (specifically Castle Floret) I know that Kenzie joined the Rogue Crew only because her lover is there (haven't named him yet) I know that that evening Gatch, Kenzie, Todd and everyone else are heading back to Castle Floret, and to Kenzie's parents (and her younger brother, Derrick) but why? There are going to be several scenes at Castle Floret and I haz update fever; so please give me suggestions as soon as you can. THANKS!
Well, one thing to explain why they are heading to Floret is perhaps they've been summoned by whoever the current squirrelking is to respond to some sort of danger (minor villain gang, like Painted Ones, Flitchaye, or some small vermin horde). After the otters help rout whoever it is, the otters can stay at Floret. One of the vermin could be an escapee from Antaga's crew, maybe, and be captured and tell Todd some information.